Tuesday 22 March 2016

My Camp Writing



Entertain: Humor writing


P persuade

I inform    
E entertain
S self



Feedback: It's a great story but there are some mistakes like punctuation -Patrick
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  1. Troy Duckworth5 April 2016 at 01:59

    Gaby, I really like how you included 3 elements to your story with the spiders, the farts and the food. (That would be a cool title!) Your descriptive language is very powerful and is a great hook. Next time it would be great to take on Patricks feedback and fix up/edit your punctuation etc.

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  2. Troy Duckworth5 April 2016 at 02:02

    PS Can you please fix the coding on your google doc. It should be height="650" width="600" thanks Gaby

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