Writing With Nic

Description: For writing this term we have been writing about a scene and our scene with Nic is a jungle and my story is about a girl getting lost I did not write what her name was or what she looked like because that is what the readers have to imagine here is my story I hope you like it.





Feedback&Feedforward: great work Gaby i love the way how you have described your story and where you are and how you feel, and i have no feedback for you all I have no it is great. Libby.


Evaluation: Thanks Libby for the feedback but I think that next time I could discribe the place where the girl was but other then that I think I did a great job and I hope you liked it as much as I did.

Handwriting

Description:Today I was doing my handwriting we do handwriting for 5 minutes handwriting is one of our priorities that I do every time for literacy I really like my handwriting because sometimes I will challenge myself then I  can get better at it.

Feedback&Feedforward: i like the way that you wrote your words neatly maybe next time you could write it twice. Kiana P

Evaluation:I think I have done well for only one minute but next time I could do another poem with it.

Skimming

Today i found out what skimming is skimming is a way of finding out all the main facts in a book or anything so you don't have to sit there reading through the whole book to see if you like it or not and here is a little poster that helped us.

HandWriting

Description: At school we have been working on our handwriting we wrote a poem in one minute and we judged each others handwriting I was in three but the best writing would go in four.

Evaluation: I think I did a great job but next time I don't think I should rush so much so I could of gotten into group four but since I was rushing I think that three was quiet good.

Spelling Post

Description: We have been practicing our spelling to see what words we know and what words we need to work on the words the words with pink highlighting on it means I need to work on them I got twenty wrong out of three hundred in total here is my sheet.


Image:

Evaluation: I think that I have done well with most of them I next time I think I could do better on most of them because most of them look like that a year six should know them but on some words I just forgot one or two letters but other then that I think that I have done well.

Hiwi The Kiwi!

Once upon a time my dad and I went fishing. We went so far out I had forgotten the way back home luckily we remembered everything. My life-jacket was a bit tight so I asked to stop and the next land we see so we stopped at a little beach and I loosened my life-jacket. After that we ad a little bit of a lunch break and then got back to the water. We saw lots of tiny fish but we past them all.... Then we saw a HUGE fish my dad got out his fishing pole and started to fish he came up to me with the huge fish with a wet towel but then I said... PUT THAT FISH BACK IN THE WATER NOOOOOW!!! so my Dad said WHY! so I said BECAUSE IT MIGHT HAVE DE BABIEZ! so he said OK BUT WHY ARE WE YELLING! I DON'T KNOW! I said  so we stopped yelling. Then we saw a bunch of birds so I got out my water gun and went CRAZY! Guys its just a water gun it won't hurt them SO STOP YELLING AT ME! when I stopped yelling I looked down at the big blue bath tub and

Starting My Labels

I am starting my new labels for the evidence of learning.

Writing With Scott

Description:We read a story called "Licked". We wrote down what it was about. We chose the ideas from the book and wrote about them. This is the result.

Me and my brother Joey wanted to pull a rat prank on our mum. She is extremely scared of rats.

When she was doing the dishes we put a giant fake rat in the cabinet so when she put away the plates she would get a huge fright. But then the plan backfired... Dad came home and he was hungry he walked in the kitchen and got out the cake from the fridge slowly crept to the cabinet and before We  could say stop AHHHHH.

You kids are in big trouble we both quietly sneaked back to our rooms and locked the door. in the morning when he calms down we can make it up to him even though the plan didn't work it was still worth it. next time we need to think bigger and better I said yeah way bigger said joey.

My Camp Writing

Entertain: Humor writing

P persuade

I inform    
E entertain
S self

Feedback: It's a great story but there are some mistakes like punctuation -Patrick

My Hiwi the kiwi writing

WALT: write to inform

Success Criteria

• Create a clear image in the readers mind
• Have a clear message (big idea)
• Powerful words (precise, clear)
• Reread writing and check for impact

My thinking questions

I choose this piece to publish because...

I need to practise...

I am pleased about...

My Published Writing

WALT: edit and publish our writing

Success Criteria

• Use a font and colour that can be easily read
• Must make sense
• Correct spelling
• Correct punctuation
• Change at least 3 words to add impact for the reader

When I went fishing my dad got on the boat and he told me to get in the boat so I did.and we took of in to the sea I screamed WE NEED OUR LIFE JACKETS "so we put them on" mine felt funny. I tried using the fishingrod and I whacked my dad on the back.so my dad tought me how to use one and I got a big fish and my dad said yum yum I can't wait to fir this big boy up I said NO. My dad said why I said because I might have baby's.so I thus it back I the water it made a mighty spash my dad started grinning at me then I felt a little sea sick.i got on another fish it was just the right size to eat it.i looked over the side of the boat while we zoomed across the mighty bathtub.i dunked the fish in the salt ice with a damp soggy cloth.the fish looked gross and I think it looked at me.i shiverd with fare
BLUH
I thuw up over the side of the boat yuckie yuck yuck I said in a quite voice.YAY! We are back at the beach I sighed in relief that we were alive so I jumped around and made a sand angle I nearly kissed the sand but then I stopped.Because I was in...PUBLIC!.i rushed to the car and my dad started driving like we we're geting chased by zombies when we got home THEN I kissed the carpet.pretending it was still the sand I had my lunch.and so that fishy adventure was ALL over.
By gaby

Gaby, your writing is sharing the Hiwi the Kiwi message. We need to be safe in the water and wear a life jacket on a boat. You also shared about the need to make sure your fish is the right size. Remember when you are publishing to make sure you check the spelling and punctuation is correct. Remember to make sure you punctuate your speech and tell the reader who is talking to help make the message even clearer, (Also there is always 1 space after a full stop)

Kerri

Writing

Writing - Swimming Sports

WALT: Write to inform

Task: Share my experiences at Russell Street School swimming sports as a recount.

Success Criteria

• Plan
• Introduction- Where, When, Who, Why
• n order
• Past tense (walked, ran, said)
• Adding details, think about what are the most powerful words